My
family is My team
My family is my team in
cleaning the house because when cleaning the house all family members helped. Daddy
is always in charge of cleaning the car garage and park behind the house. Daddy
cleaned the car garage because he wanted to clean the car at the same time. My
mother cleaned their room and family room. Mom is also in charge of cleaning
the kitchen. In our family, mom is people who know about the kitchen very
well. I and my siblings are in charge of cleaning our own rooms. After that my
brother will clean the bathroom and drain the bathtub. My sister and I will
clean the living room. Our family has a duty to clean the house, like a team
that has its own duties, that's why my family is my team in managing the house.
I like your story about your family,
BalasHapusBut i think your essay is too short
Maybe you can add the supporting idea
Hello...
HapusThank you for your sugesstion, i will fix it later :)
I really amaze with how you and your family manage to clean the house together. You delivered it nicely into good sentences. But, it will be more amazing if you add more in minor supporting sentence after "I and my siblings are in charge of cleaning our own rooms." to make the story more clearer
BalasHapusHahaha :D
HapusThank your for your Suggesstion Sita.
I will make it clearer
Hello sister, i am so happy to read your essay. Your story is unique and good but i want to give suggestion is you can make it long essay to become perfect essay. After i read your essay is very shortly. Thank you
BalasHapusHallo Wildan,
HapusThank you for your sugesstion, i will fix it later
Suddenly, I miss my family. Your story sounds nice. But, It will be nicer if you can make us realize which one is the main topic, minor sentence, and major sentence of the paragraph, because honestly it is difficult for me to differentiate which one is the major and minor. Fighting, mutia ☺️
BalasHapusHahaha, we are same, we are far from our family.
HapusThank you for your sugesstion Mima, i will fix it later :)
wow its a good story and i am very amaze with your family that clean the house together. good job!
BalasHapusIn my opinion it's too short to be an essay, but that doesn't mean it's not a good one. There are still a few ideas that can be elaborated so it will make the essay more interesting, for example from the sentence: I and my siblings it can still be elaborated into a new paragraph.
BalasHapusThank you for your sugesstion Axel. I will make it longer later.
HapusI like your story, your story remind me about my family
BalasHapusI love how bound you are with your family and how you guys can manage well the task, this one can be a good example of family
BalasHapuswhat a lovely family, and its a good essay
BalasHapusWow!! I like your story, and after read your essay suddenly,that make me miss my family.may i suggest, if u want more better u cant add more your essay because ur essay is to short, and make it again clearly. Keep fighting girl!!!
BalasHapusWhat a unified family! I think it would be better if you make the main topic and supporting idea clearer. And put more sentence, because it is too short.
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BalasHapusIt's a great activites! You and your family did together.
BalasHapusIt's better if you can show major supporting sentences clearer.
Cheer up♡
aww, Thank you Nicky :D
BalasHapusWow, it's very exciting to be able to clean the house together with our loved ones and I am very happy to read it, but for the story it's very short.
BalasHapusMy Family is My Team
BalasHapusEvery weekend is the time for all my family members to stay at home, so we spent the weekend to clean up the house together. My family is my team in cleaning the house. My father, my mother, me and my siblings had our own task in cleaning the house. Daddy is always in charge of cleaning the car garage and park behind the house. Daddy cleaned the car garage because he wanted to clean the car at the same time, he also swept the park behind the house, cut the grass and water the plants. My father is a good person, so he always wants to help clean the house. My mother cleaned their bedroom and family room. Mom is very careful and clean, so she will make sure that there is no dust and dirt left behind. Mom is also in charge of cleaning the kitchen. In our family, mom is people who know about the kitchen very well. I and my siblings are in charge of cleaning our own bedrooms. since childhood, we have been taught to sweep and mop up our own bedroom, so now we are independent and that has become our habit. We also change bed linen regularly. After we clean our own bedroom, my brother will clean the bathroom and drain the bathtub. My sister and I will clean the living room. We believe that a clean house will be comfortable to live in and keep its inhabitants away from disease. My family has our own task to clean the house, like a team that has its own tasks, that's why my family is my team in managing the house.
Hello sister, i am so happy to read your essay. Your story is unique and good but i want to give suggestion is you can make it long essay to become perfect essay. After i read your essay is very shortly. Thank you
BalasHapus