Topic: The impact of globalization on gender equality
Support Sentence 1: Not only men can be leaders but women too.
Support Sentence 2: Women have the opportunity to pursue education as high as possible.
Support Sentence 3: Globalization provides space for women to work and be creative.
Concluding Sentence: In summary, globalization causes the balance between women and men to be eroded and even disappear, every human being can take positive benefits from it.
Essay
Globalization has many
impacts on human life, there are positive impacts and there are negative
impacts. The impact of globalization has become very pronounced because it
occurs in everyday life, one of which is gender equality. Gender equality leads
to the existence of a balance between
the position of women and men, for example in the fields of leadership, education, and employment.
Before the development of globalization, the position of leaders was usually handled by men, but now it can also be handled by women. This is evidenced by the
presence of several well-known women who became leaders, for example, Megawati
Soekarnoputri as the country's leader, Susi Pudjiastuti as minister and Neneng
Hasanah as the district leader.

Nowadays many women
already have higher education, examples of women with high education are Alyssa
Soebandono, Tasya Kamila, and Maudy Ayunda. In the past women did not have to
go to school because people thought that in the end, women would only become housewives.
After the progress of the era and the development of globalization, not only
men can receive higher education but also women. A woman must have a high
education because she will be a teacher for her children and her knowledge will
become a provision in her career.

In the past, women will only be at home and become
housewives, but in this globalization era, women can do the same work as men. There have
been many women who work even though they work in jobs that are usually for
men, for example, engineering departments, drivers, and architecture and
development.
In summary, globalization causes the balance between women and men to be eroded and even disappear, every human being can take positive benefits from it. There are many parts that only men can do but because
globalization women can also do it, such as not only man but women also can be
leader, women can have high education, and women can do the same work as a man.
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HapusI really like your essay mut, because it talk about gender equality. But your essay too general, maybe you can talk about woman who success, or something that more detail. Keep up the good work, mut!
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BalasHapusHi Muti, you have a good essay. I think this sentence "there are positive impacts and there are negative impacts" for make it better, you can change into " there are positive and negative impacts".
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Because of some comments, I changed the essay to be more specific.
BalasHapusOUTLINE OF THE ESSAY
Topic : The influence of globalization on gender equality.
Support Sentence 1 : Not only men but women can also work in engineering.
Support Sentence 2 : Drivers become one profession that women can do.
Support Sentence 3 : Women can also work in the security field like men.
Concluding Sentence : In summary, globalization changes about the differences between men and women, one of the biggest changes is in the field of profession. Now women can pursue a profession that is usually occupied by men, for example, engineering, drivers, and security professions.
ESSAY
Globalization has many impacts on human life, one of which is gender equality. Gender equality leads to a balance between the position of women and men, like profession. Nowadays almost all professions can be done by men and women, and more opportunities are open for women to pursue jobs that are generally done by men.
Engineering is known as a profession that is mostly carried out by men because the work has heavy physical activity such as having to climb tall buildings or heat up during field work. Nowadays not only men but women can also work in the engineering. The main key to being able to survive is to be confident and continue to practice developing research and knowledge.
Drivers are one of the professions that women can do. In general, drivers are male, but now there are many female drivers. Women are entrusted to be drivers because they are more patient in driving at a steady pace. Especially now there is an online application that makes it easier for women to work as drivers.
Women can also work in the security like men. In the era of globalization many women have undergone security professions such as soldiers, police and security guards. Like men, women who work in the security sector are also equipped with martial arts education and other physical exercises. This proves that women's abilities are not inferior to men's abilities
In short, globalization has caused a change in differences between men and women, one of the biggest changes is in the profession. Now women can do professions that are usually done by men, for example, engineering, drivers, and the security profession. This proves that globalization is very influential on gender equality.
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